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The Adventures of Chet Chesterfield: Episode 6 - Doctor Monocle's Revenge!

I wrote this as a comic script for Derek. It was a challenge because he asked for two pages and to make it kid friendly.

Also, I don't know if there's going to be a short story next month. I sort of accidentally started writing a novel I didn't know I had in me. Before I knew it I had a hundred pages of it. I'm trying to focus on that because it's coming so easily, but I'll try to get a short story done.

PAGE ONE:

Panel one: LOGO: The Adventures of Chet Chesterfield: Episode 6 - Doctor Monocle's Revenge!

Panel two:

TEXT
Last time in the exciting Adventures of Chet Chesterfield:
Our hero, the intrepid explorer and treasure hunter CHET CHESTERFIELD
and his trusty friend and sidekick JIMMY MAGILLACUTTY, were traveling
to the cursed peak of MONOCLE MOUNTAIN in search of the fabled
TREASURE of the CAT'S EYE DIAMOND, when they were attacked by
the undead, brought to life by the evil DR. MONOCLE, using his
patented ZOMBIE RAY.

Panel three:

Jimmy and Chet are punching out zombies:

JIMMY
How do we stop 'em, Chet?

Panel four:

Again, Jimmy and Chet are punching out zombies, heading further up the mountain.

CHET
I don't know, Jimmy. But we better figure it out quick!

Panel five:

There's an observatory at the top of the mountain. Rays are coming out of the telescope looking thing at the top.

CHET
Look, up there! It looks like an observatory. I bet that mysterious ray
is behind all of this.

Panel six:

Jimmy and Chet run up the mountain, toward the observatory.

PAGE TWO:

Panel one:

Jimmy and Chet are outside the observatory:

JIMMY
Look, Chet! A door!

CHET
Let's go Jimmy!

Panel Two:

Jimmy and Chet are just inside the door of a laboratory.

JIMMY
Oh no, Chet, it's...

CHET
DR. MONOCLE!

Panel Three:

CLOSE ON: Dr. Monocle

DR. MONOCLE
Yes. It's me! And you won't foil my plot to get the Cat's Eye again!

CHET (he's off panel)
That's what you think!

DR. MONOCLE
That's what you think!

Panel Four:

CLOSE ON: Dr. Monocle's gloved hand, pulling a lever.

SOUND
KRICK!

Panel Five:

A steel cage has dropped over Jimmy and Chet! Dr. Monocle is tilted back in insidious laughter!

JIMMY
How are we gonna get out of this one, Chet?

CHET
I don't know Jimmy. I don't know.

DR. MONOCLE
Mwa-hahahahaha!

Panel Six:

TEXT
Be sure to come back next time for the next thrilling installment of:
The Adventures of Chet Chesterfield!
(Next time: Episode 7: Dr. Monocle's Malpractice!)

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